A short story

Hi everyone! a few chapters for Tess's story are almost finished. But anyway I wanted to share a short story:


Every year in the hobbit village a sorceress named Ariel would come and visit and tell of her adventures…”Tell us about the elves” said a young red-headed Hobbit. “Of course…I have run into many elves before, lords and ladies, kings , princes, and princesses, but they are all different, you see” Ariel said. “I can tell you the story , about elves” she said. “It was a dark and rainy night the rain was falling hard and I couldn’t see where I was going , I could make out things like mountains , but I still felt very lost….then suddenly a light appeared , it wasn’t a whisp..that would most likely lead me to my death, no…it was a figure carrying a lantern , ‘Are you lost?’ asked the figure, I nodded…’I have been here for days’ I said… ‘And the rain hasn't cleared since’. The figure sighed, ‘a dark power is growing…’ the figure said…’we elves are trying to find out where it’s coming from’..” The young Hobbits gasped, “What was the growing power?” one asked, “what is the growing power?  what happens next? the person is a elf I knew it!” asked the young red-headed hobbit, suddenly “Edward Short!” a voice called, The young hobbit turned around. “What are you doing?” asked the girl, it was his older sister. “Just listening to adventure stories” he said. “Come with me” she said, “Ariel the great , has brought  many of us on adventures” his sister said. “So? what’s wrong with that?” he asked. “Adventures are a waste of time you should know that by now” said his sister, “Well…I don’t think so.” he said. “Elves go on adventures all the time, so why don’t we?” he asked, and walked away “I…I” said his Sister, “I never thought about it”. “But it still would be unsuitable!!” she shouted… 


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I what do you think? I would love to hear your thoughts in the comments.